Friday 28 November 2014

Paignton Pier

Walking plank’ed deck
Through the gaps, the grey sea glimpsed
Churns and heaves below

28.11.14

1 comment:

  1. Not sure about "plank'ed", am I allowed to use the apostrophe to break the word up like that? The original was "I walk the planked deck" which is a little more directly punning, but it felt like "planked" really wanted to be two syllables.

    Pretty happy with the second line, not quite so sure about the third.

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